I took some time last night and this morning to go through everyone’s submissions so far, and here are just a few things I’ve noted.
Aerlwyn - Jessica Winter
Build looks good, good with a gun, not so good with her fists which is fine. But could you list the two extra languages and include a background?
Bombaatu - Wu Guang
Like this build a lot, the Elongation is very interesting. I’m not sure how most GMs do it, but for the sake of simplicity, “chinese” is okay for a language as opposed to going into specific dialects. Other than the background (especially the “wanted” complication), it’s looking good.
Nineofspaes - Truth Ricketts
We’ve discussed the build before, and I’m good with it. I like the background, although can you add some complications?
And while I know Truth has no skills in it, perhaps a small sidearm might be useful, but that’s entirely up to you.
XeroKhan - Jack Spade
I like the idea of the character. One minor nitpick with the build, you list Precise Attack, but not it’s details. I assume it’s Ranged, but is it Cover or Concealment?
Badpenny - Horace Higgins
Everything looks good, one question regarding his background. Where was he living when his daughters were kidnapped and his wife died?
Timothy - Azeri Belasko
It’s an interesting character concept. Regarding his background, I’m curious what he would have done to make himself well known enough to be hired by the Railroad? Doing a little research, it does seem that the Dakotas, Wyoming, etc. is sheep country (I had no idea to be honest), so I guess he could be considered local to the Northern Pacific Railroad. If you could maybe flush that part of out of his background (i.e., what he did after his father died to gain him at least a little local notoriety).
Bubblepop - Makkapite
I mentioned this in another post, but might as well repeat myself. I like the concept of the character, but can you add an “Offensive” section? I see languages are there now (or maybe I missed them last night), so that’s great. Just a background then.